Pippiedooda

This is a really good beginning- I'm interested already even though its quite short. I hope you write more! I can't really think of that much that could be improved ...

Hi this is a good start! I liked the beginning, the death of the sister was a good way of drawing the reader in. I've got a few coments on ...

This is a good beginning- i want to know what happens next! In general i thought the story was well written, a couple of comment on improvement: I think the ...

Awww thats a really sweet story! It was fun to read about fish inlove instead of people too :) Just a few comments: I think you should break up some ...

I think your story's good so far, i liked the prologue too! I think the story moves at a nice pace and has a good amount of detail, i've only ...

Hey! Me again :D I really enjoyed this story- i loved the twist at the ending! I think the story was well written, i could only see a few of ...

I like the story so far, i thought the beginning was a nice way of introducing the characters and the situation, i hope you write more! There were quite a ...

I found this story very interesting, i liked it- it was original and the begginning drew me in :) I won't go over sentences that i think can be improved ...

I liked this story, it was a nice caption of a moment and i enjoyed the way it unfolded. I think for something you did in one night with no ...

Wow- thats a great story! I really loved the whole storyline and the ending was really good, very exciting too! There were a few spelling mistakes throughout the text and ...

I really liked the idea of this story! It shows an interesting twist to the traditional fairytale and would make a good begginning for a longer story. I think its ...

I thought this was a good story, really sweet ending! :D There were a couple of things i thought could be improved on but overall i enjoyed reading it- to ...

I thought this was a really good story, a nice length and i liked the ending. I liked the style of writing too :) , only a few comments on ...

Good story! At first i was a little confused but i think that makes you want to read on to find out what is going on. Just a couple of ...

This is quite a short prologue, i would advise adding more to it, but still a good start! Just a few things i think could be improved: bracing for the ...