PersonaAlias

Thanks for tagging me! Sorry it’s been almost a month before reviewing, but I haven’t been on in a while! Throughout the whole chapter you refer to the boy as ...

Thanks for tagging me! The trees shadow falls over it, shielding the slim form from my prying gaze. But it is a slim form. Slender and young. Do you mean ...

He swings his body down into the gap, feet dangling into space. Nothing minor, I’m just pointing out the use of “into” twice in the sentence. My first thought when ...

Hey there! Here for another review! Again, these are just my opinions and advice, so you don't have to change anything if you like how it is. This is me ...

“Inappropriate,” I condemn the thought, trusting away the drop of hope. “He would do it, but I’m not asking that of him.” Did you by chance mean “thrusting”, not “trusting”? ...

I’m writing my review before I read the others, so I’m sorry if I repeat anything! I think there is merit to repeated suggestions though. Maybe I have a different ...

Wow, this is really good! You did an awesome job at setting up your characters and their personalities. I only saw a few things to consider revising, and I'm just ...

You've got a cool story going on here, jumping right into some action that catches the reader's attention. I hope my advice can help you make it even better :) ...

Hi there! You have a great story coming along. This is my first review, but I'll do my best to give you helpful advice. I'm going to focus mainly on ...