PerpetualBhridge

Ahahahaha, I usually don't go for parodies, but this was hilarious . It was absolutely fantastic, usually subtlety is more effective, but I think this style works for a Breaking ...

Hi! I really liked this beginning, just a few nitpicks: Guys flocking around her, best friend to everyone and butter wouldn’t melt looks. Guys flocking around her, best friend to ...

This was really beautiful, I think castlesinthesky ^^ got all the nitpicky stuff, so I'll do the easy part:I'll tell you how much I liked this. :) It really flowed, ...

Very nice! So cute and so poetic, and so true! It's kinda simple, but complex, I really like the idea and the way it's written. Are we gonna get a ...

Thanks for the pm, that was fast! Running through the tangle was the boy I’d waiter for my whole life I'm sorry that I'm so nitpicky, but it's who I ...

Awesome, are you going to continue? pleeease continue. The descriptions are lovely and you set up a lot of questions, that I do think need to be answered...please? Just one ...

I would really like to read more of this, it's good. But I think you could set up the setting better and tell us the age and possibly a little ...

Awwww! I had to say it :) I think if you showed a little for of the characters' feelings through their movements, the effect would be better. Maybe put a ...

I really like that story, and I really liked your first line, captivating. I do think, however, that your first two paragraphs could be a little less, er, straight-forward: Have ...

It was nicely written and great to read, but I have to say the topic is too cliche, people, well, they wont care about what you're writing about. You have ...

I really liked this, it was so cute, but it so wasn't because it was real. The style is really unique and easy to read, you don't have to think, ...

Ah, that's beautiful! I love it. I have them too, Do you see them? Do you see them! I have them too. -That is my favorite part, I can really ...