PenguinAttack

Little Women is an excellent book, definitely. The problem here is that they're very different in what they want to say, Little Women and Pride and Prejudice. I love Pride ...

Selene: In regards to the scrunching face business. That was just an example, to help with the characterisation and setting. You can have her scrunch her face when she speaks ...

Thanks heaps, Apples! I'll totally change that line, and proceeded is a bit icky for me too, I wasn't sure how I could change it though? I'll see what I ...

Jig! Thanks muchos for critting. ^^ I changed the "and", it works and it doesn't in a way. So thanks for the suggestion. I won't be changing "silence" though, because ...

Thank you all for your comments! I lurve you dearly for them. ^^ I'd like to stress that this is only the first chapter, and there's more to come, and ...

Thanks guys, for critiquing this. ^^ I'm really glad you all enjoyed it and got something from it. Thanks again. *Hearts* Le Penguin.

Thanks so much for critiquing this, guys! ^^ I'm glad you all liked it, I worked a little on it, so I really appreciate it. Thanks once again. *Hearts* Le ...

^^ Thanks, Fye! I fixed up that one line, so now we know where that breeze is coming from... sort of. xD And I'm so very glad you liked it. ...

Thanks Max. ^^ I really appreciate the review. ^^ *Hearts* Le Penguin.

Colour, Penguin? Dogs are colour blind. t Honest to Betsy. I didn't even realise. xD I retract that one request. The rest stands. ^^ *Hearts* Le Penguin.

Thank you everyone! You all rock for reviewing and commenting. I'm glad that you liked it, and I'm looking at the possible revisions now. Thank you once again, your comments ...

*huggles back!* (Lovely to talk to you too) I think that letting the characters grow throughout the story is a great idea. But you need to prepare us for that ...

Thank you both for the comments! They were helpful and totally valid and I hope this is kind of what you guys were looking for. ^^ I've edited this up, ...

Muchas gracias to you both! I'll work on that line, Clo, and have a look at the other things you pointed out, you make complete sense. ^^ And thanks, Curves! ...

Thank you all for your comments! They're much appreciated. I've altered it slightly, although I'm still not happy with it, so any other comments are to be loved and cherished. ...