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Hi Jon! Okay. So. I think you're adorable and sweet but this is a weird poem. I say adorable and sweet because the idea of this poem is so innocently ...

Jazz Buddeh! This is wonderful, I love the changes you've made and I think it expresses exactly what you explained to me. The words you use are well chosen, and ...

Hi, Kylan! I do rather like this, I think it's terribly pretty and you have some gorgeous images here that I am envious of. Particularly "and the purple flowers/ sigh ...

Hi there! Firstly, I'd like to ask why you've posted this in all capitals and bolded, when it needs neither? I've re-typed your poem in lowercase, using the appropriate capitals ...

This is going to be the most useless critique I give today, Imouto-chan. I loved it. It ran beautifully, your flow was excellent and the narrative progressed perfectly. I loved ...

Hey Kylan! So. You’re an amazing writer, which I don’t think anyone is going to disagree with. You’re so amazing, really, that I felt intimidated to pick up your story ...

Hi Man, I know I’ve taken forever to do this critique, I was more busy than anticipated. What I’m going to do here is a basic line by line critique; ...

Smoogle! I really quite like this, although I can somehow tell you're still a bit hesitant. Your talent is clear, however, and I love how the narrative progresses. You've got ...

Hi Wonderingkate, Don’t be too embarrassed by this, the most amazing thing is that you’re so willing to improve on your poetry. In this poem in particular, I like how ...

Hey! My mum loves Georgette Heyer, but I've not been able to get into them just as yet. What attracted you to her books? I'm curious as to why you ...

And where shall death find thee, oh high plains drifter, when at last a bullet finds itself in your back? < Excellent first lines, they hooked me in and are ...

Imouto-chan! I haven’t reviewed in a while so I’m rusty. But! I like this. I have some suggestions and some other comments, but I want to start with the fact ...

We all give excuses to live as one humanity... < Lose the ellipses as Matt suggested. Actually, I’d consider losing the entire “line” it’s not really necessary. If you wanted ...

Okay, I’ve already mentioned this in chat, but yes. I’ve read this before, and you’ve most certainly changed it a lot. Firstly. The language is where your issue is evolving. ...

Just replying very quickly to this - I'm not sure how much time I have and I don't want to forgot about your question, hehe. I think you have to ...