PeanutPhoebe

Oh I understand what you mean now. Makes much more sense!

Thanks again for the review! I do realize there was a lot of dialogue in this chapter, but that will improve, I promise! I'm not planning on working much more ...

Thanks again for the review! No problem with the nitpicks, I didn't edit as thoroughly as I should have. They're a lot of help!

Thanks! I will remind you that this is chapter two, and I've already posted two parts of chapter one, and one part before that has all of our planning...(I'm co-writing ...

Thanks! General Adams is pretty insignificant, although we might see him a bit more later in the story...

Im actually working on the next chapter now:) The names will make sense later on, and yes, I came up with Natiliah

Thanks! Im co-writng this, so I will work on it as much as I can. If names are messing you up, I did post a piece that has all the ...

Thanks! I'f you want some more character/setting info, I posted a piece with the planning we have for this. It tells a lot of that. We're trying to kind of ...

Thanks! My BFF and I are co-writing this, and she wrote this chapter, so she gets the credit:)

Thanks so much! Actually, I'm co-writing this with my BFF, and she wrote this chapter. We kind wanted an omniscient 3rd person, so that's why she switched, since there are ...

whoah, totally messed this up... I have no clue why it posted the same thing three times. I would suggest you read my other thing I posted first though. It's ...

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Ah, I see. I'd actually never heard of that. Learn something new every day!

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Thanks for the review! I definitely understand what you mean by the confusing sentences.