PaulClover

This just keeps getting better and better :) sorry it took me so long to get to chapter three, BTW! This is probably the funnest, most readable story I've read ...

It's great to read "Cave" again; for a moment there, I was afraid you'd decided to abandon it. Nothing to really nitpick at. As per usual, your composition is well-written ...

Clover here again! This was by far the most accessible of the chapters; and look, there's even some dialogue! :) Haha, I kid. Most of my criticisms have been put ...

Here for chapter two! I don't really have much to say about this chapter in particular. The same criticisms apply (the lack of explanation/character development); as do the praises (everything ...

It's really refreshing to read something so experimental; then again, most of your work is more than a little outside the box, so I guess I should expect it at ...

This is a really good little snippet of story :) I really liked the dialogue between the two friends. Reminds me of actual girls at the high school I go ...

I'm really digging on this story, bro! Excuse my hippie dialect, I'm feeling little spacey right now :) All in all, a really cool chapter to a really awesome novel-in-progress. ...

This was really well-written and neat. I especially like the way you obliterated the fourth wall at the end; don't think that's ever been done before, and it works well ...

This is a really funny story and an incredibly neat concept :) I really like the idea of doing a man-hunts-dragon story from the point of view of the beast, ...

WOW, this was really good and creepy. I've said a thousand times that poetry isn't really my thing, but this was pretty provoking. I like the savagery of it, I ...

I really liked this! As a sufferer of insomnia, I can attest to everything that happened! Shotguns indeed! LOL just kidding :) I totally dug how it was put together, ...

I tip my hat to you, sir! This is, to me, the best chapter thus far! The amnesty between Lavern and Myra is very well handled, and it reflects how ...

This is a really neat story, and I'm interested to see where it goes. It feels kind of like a political thriller except in a fantastical setting. It's really awesome ...

This is shaping up to be one of the coolest stories I've ever read, period. The entire narrative oozes a dreamlike, almost eerie quality. I almost want to wait until ...

I agree with what Dante said :) This poem is very fractured, in a way, and that's what gives it beauty. Also, incredibly big words. Not sure what some of ...