PatrickMulvihill

I like it! Your description is rich and gives a good sense of the dream-like mood. I personally thought the phrase "Tuxedo man with the magical moves" sounds a little ...

Very good story! I like how the style is reminiscent of old folk tales like Coyote, where characters learn lessons. The exile of the witch at the end was a ...

I am sometimes a literal person so I might not have the same interpretation of your poem but I thought it was great. I felt a lonliness and isolation in ...

Quite an intense introduction with fairly deep views on life. I was intrigued by the opening. I do suggest a smoother transition between the disscusion of deep philosophy and the ...

I love the spirit of the story. The cheeriness of the character and his optimism at the experience is vivid in your writing. Your flow was good too. It never ...

Interesting story! Some cool descriptions in there like comparing the cieling to the stars. One aspect I would tweak, however, is that the story starts off on a one dimensional ...