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  • Short Story » Realistic, Other Re: When the city sleeps.

    You again. Aha yes, I recall reviewing your short peace about an inseparable duo, one of which who hated the other. At least that was the impression I garnered. And ...

    Feb 6, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: More of A Journal Than Anything [Edited]

    I found this something I could ironically relate to, though only through hubris of my teenage years. Many a time I found myself at odds with my teacher and class ...

    Jan 30, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Science Fiction Re: The Rholtaii Heritage - Chapter 8

    I'm going to try and break down to the core of the problems I had. 1. I don't know or care about anyone in the story To say this is ...

    Jan 24, 2013
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Kill Your Darlings and Stuff

    This sounds like a poorly written English essay. Thusly, every time I saw reference to a write I did not know I assumed there was to be attached a small ...

    Jan 20, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Rye-lie

    *cracks knuckles* Alrighty. -no best friend who moved away leaving me by myself and friendless- This line feels a little awkward to the mind when read. I'd suggest either dropping ...

    Jan 20, 2013
  • Short Story » Humor, Romantic Re: A short story that doesn't really have a point, written only to satisfy my pathetic needs for fluff and frowny Arthur.

    An excellent small piece, at least in terms of characterisation. You've established a pair of characters who mix so well in such few words. The reader is given a good ...

    Jan 19, 2013
  • Short Story » General, General Re: [September Contest] It's What I Do

    Something about your story... I'm not quite sure what it is, but something about it made me feel... disinterested. I couldn't really raise a care for the poor man being ...

    Sep 22, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Playthings [rewritten version]

    That was utterly heart rending, but now for a proper review. You set up what seems to be a feel good story, at the start the little girl heading home ...

    Sep 19, 2010
  • Script » General, General Re: DOCTOR WHO - Attack of the Time Flies (Parts 1-4)

    Ooh, script format, interesting. I'll start off by saying, most of the scripts I'm familiar with work in a different style, that is, they have the speakers name to the ...

    Sep 16, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: [September Contest] The Postman

    I'm not entirely sure what to make of this. Is this awesome? Yes, I would say so. Is it cleverly funny because of how its random? I think so. With ...

    Sep 15, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Deleted

    Oh boy, lucky you, I'm a reviewer who doesn't particularly like religion... Also, this review will probably be a bit nitpicky. She picked up the lantern I had set beside ...

    Sep 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Drop Off Point--Second Part Posted

    Hope you don't mind being the guinea pig for my first review. I found your short story very intriguing. The way you write flows very well and progresses smoothly. You've ...

    Sep 8, 2008


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