Parasky

I like this poem, but I have to say that the structure is a bit off. I like the imagery. If I can suggest something, you should do something like ...

Wow, that's amazing. You've captured the emotion of the story so well. The actions of the characters make such a vivid imagery. The stuttering really shows the fear in the ...

I really enjoyed this. It was very descriptive, and the foreshadowing was amazing. You managed to tell me exactly what would happen, then how it happened and the story was ...

What I thought stood out in this poem was the emotion and the story. I agree that the flow could use some work, but overall I think that powerful emotions ...

I enjoyed this poem a lot. However, in stanzas six and seven you changed your pattern of rhyming. You went from a pattern of 1-1, 2-2 to a patter of ...