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Glad they helped! I'll put them on my watchlist for other things to review. :)

Rewriting is a good idea. All books need to go through a few drafts befor they really find their feet. :)

I think it's mainly because Dragon wasn't gone very long , or it didn't seem that way. It was like she just woke up, saw he wasn't in his room ...

I finished the second and final part today so I'll be editing it and posting it up soon. Hopefully it takes the plot in a direction that's less predictable. I'm ...

Yes, I see what you mean. I'll see what I can do with it. Thank you!

Thank you for the review! I am planning to get this approved for the Writing Resources section after I've made a few more changes. About the telling examples: can you ...

Oh, I didn't realise it was him! I think it's not necessarily that she recognises him, but that she says 'You would stoop this low?' like she knows him well ...

Thank you! I am a bit worried about the length, but showing is such a beast of a topic. I'll definitely work tightening up the showing guidelines. :)

Obviously there is a lot of subjectivity in this - guides are just guides, and all writing rules can be broken. I wonder if your preference for the first example ...

Hi, just to let you know, reviewers only get a notification if you comment on their actual review, so it's best to respond to them individually if you want to ...

I'm glad you found it helpful! I'm going to redraft it to include showing pointers as well, because like you say I think it does make sense to touch on ...

Okay, I'll take a look at it.

I'm glad it helped! :)

Thank you! I'll definitely work on a writing stronger definitions and examples of showing and telling - I glossed over it a bit because it's a topic that's so often ...

Thank you! I never originally planned on doing a section on good showing because there is an article somewhere in resources that seems to focus exclusively on showing, however I ...