Panikos

Hi, Honora! Dropping in for a quick review. I haven't read any of the other chapters so apologies if I've missed some details, but I'm still going to try and ...

Hi, SubSubLibrarian! Panikos dropping in for a quick review. I'm not very familiar with the rest of the story, but I'm still going to try and make this critique as ...

Hi, Bisc! Happy Review Day! Small Comments Of course, this had included a fair amount of skulking in side streets whenever he spotted anyone who might take offence to his ...

Hi mellifera! Back to review. Small Comments “The Norman- oh!” Carter stepped back quickly, gripping the lead rope in his hand. “I need to grab Fabella!” I don't really get ...

Hi mellifera! Sorry I've not been reviewing as regularly. So much for critiquing a chapter a day...why do I ever set schedules for myself? I'm going to keep this review ...

Hi, Bisc! Back again to review. Sorry for taking a while to get to this, but I'm glad to be up to date! Small Comments MacAlpine was off on another ...

Hi, Bisc! I can finally post this. :P Small Comments “No time to explain,” Helen said. “Shouldn’t we wait for Josie to get back from the bathroom?” Eric asked. “No ...

Hi, mellifer! Back again :) Small Comments The lovely colonial-style building loomed over him, the forest green paint freshly done seemed harsher and more striking than usual. I'm trying not ...

Hi, melli! Small Comments Why hasn’t something invented an off switch for anyone’s brain yet? This line felt a bit strange to me just because I associate 'off switch' with ...

Hi Bisc! Here to review as promised. :) Small Comments Eric’s foot hit the platform, his first step on Scottish soil in six years. I really love this line as ...

Hey mellifera! Back again. Small Comments “This is a dead end. We’re getting nowhere, and we need to find her before someone else does,” he said, turning on his heel ...

Hey, mellifera! Uni is done for me so I can finally devote my time to reviewing properly! Small Comments After several minutes, Carter had grown too worried that Bazzoli would ...

Hi mellifera! Back again! This is a definite improvement on the first chapter with regards to Plot Stuff happening. Shiloh's disappearance - and the note with it - sets this ...

Hi, mellifera! Finally I've got round to reading this from the start! As an opening chapter, I think the strongest element of this is the characterisation and how well you ...

Hi, Mage! I know you've got plans to rewrite the whole story, but I'm just going to write up an uber-quick review to help shift this out of the Green ...