PandaAiKorai

I'm so confused on Ryder's role! Is he a thief, or someone who is actually willing to aid Chance in his quest? I'm utterly puzzled. But I'll read on to ...

This is sort of how I'm feeling right now, very lost but wanting so much to be found and forgiven. It gives me a bit of support knowing I'm not ...

Me AND my boyfriend were greatly intrigued by your story. I like the part where Lilian's friend comes over with "Didn't she ask?" Really nice twist. I truly hope that ...

Turqoise- turquoise. Otherwise, a very sweet piece. I would suggest MAYBE turning this into a poem instead. If I weren't in class, I'd give a more elaborate critique! At any ...

I'm in class, and had to control myself from rotflmao. Haha! Nice way to end such a sweet, short little piece. I expected something deeper, but am VERY glad my ...

I appreciate everyone's commentary and will definitely take every piece of advice once I edit this. In truth, this tidbit is actually part of a larger story I'd written down- ...

EXCELLENT TWIST! Upon reading the first one, I was left with the impression that there would be a twist in part two, but that completely exceeded my expectations. All I ...