Palantalid

Firstly, 33 because that's the age at which Jesus was nailed to the cross and got himself pierced by the spear of destiny. It's also the age at which Hart ...

Hilarious. Totally!

I'm afraid this isn't stream of consciousness (which is supposed to read in the same forms and sequences in which we think). I guess the fact that the verses got ...

I second for LoTF. It's got a style of its own and the allusions used don't need research to get through. But I agree it's a bit dry.....

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Thanks awfully for your comments. They're well taken as I'm still searching for my groove. Lil: The rythm was well, non-existant. I was trying to use intelligent line-breaks.....like you know, ...

Golly, yes! The something lake at Innisfree. And she died at the house where Yeats had once lived near Chalcot Square or something. Have to hand it to you. I ...

Thank you, booky and Rieda. I'm glad that these were not totally underestimated. And congratulations bkwrm, for catching that grammatical. I was just checking whether anyone would notice. No, really, ...

Right I edited stanza 4 according to you b'bob. Or could I call you bebop? However, after I had written it, I thought that the last line might sound like ...

Well....if anybody sees this can they tell me whether i've rewritten it properly? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....?

Awfully helpful, Jabs. I appreciate it whole heartedly. Will make corrections immediately.

bravo.....yes, Blake's 'Songs of Innocence and Experience' did help with the flow of thoughts and no, there are absolutely no lines copied.........mostly because i've never read the Songs. but i ...

jolly good, to hear all this. can't escape without a hearty thank you and of course i'll look into the whole thing. i wont be taking it off though. if ...

well, i normally relate the meaning of the poem in the last line or so. i've always thought that if you write something about your own fancies it's often not ...