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So I know you don't know this, but I secretly stalk your poetry. This isn't a review, its just me asking, heart on my sleeve, that you always continue to ...

I can see what you mean, it gets a bit blocky doesn't it? I'll work on that tomorrow :) thanks!

I do believe you've spent some time on it, as I stated above the story is unique and interesting, it just needs some refining. Don't delete it, just improve it ...

From out of the azure waters came life, from the sky came life, life came burrowing out of the Calico Galaxy. From the night sky in a fury of fire ...

Hey thanks for the review! This work is actually pretty old though, maybe try checking out the current literary forums for something new to review!

Sorry, the author is a very publicized case. She was kidnaped and held captive for 18 years before being found. Lol I just sort of assumed most people had heard ...

This isn't a story I wrote... this is a review of a memoir.

Twit I will for sure work on some of the grammar issues, for some reason dialogue grammar always manages to screw me up. Thanks for the nit picks! Tanya You ...

The commas and the fragments were intentional, actually. I did change the one run on sentence mentioned above mostly because I felt it was more powerful when it was split, ...

The.Dreamwalker: I kind of agree about the last line, it was one of those last minute adds that I did while editing, when I had already sort of lost the ...

I leave this as a reminder to myself to review when I get home :)

That wasn't a title at the top, if you look, it's a link to chapter one. I think that reading chapter one will probably clear up some questions for you, ...

Kamas> It's intended to show what it really feels like for the abused years later. Where some details are very vivid, voices, tones, smiles and eyes and faces, but then ...

The commas and dashes are probably not necessary, but they're intended to show where I paused in my own mind before continuing. It's supposed to feel a bit jagged and ...

Amber-liquid death = death by alcohol. The amber-liquid of course being the alcohol.