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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Observations Through Dented Glass

    Really well done; it has a quick, springy rhythm to it that I really like, and your use of language is strong and lyrical. At the same time I must ...

    Aug 1, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Everything Ends

    Very cool use of the sphere, it was a strong image and worked really well as a metaphor. I really liked the minimal nature of your lines - very straightforward, ...

    Aug 1, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: You're Gone.

    Very sad :( This reads as very heartfelt and I don't like critiquing poetry that comes from such a vulnerable place, but I'm going to do it anyways. The majority ...

    Jul 29, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, Other Re: Coffee Stains

    Sweet and lovely and very romantic! You've done an exceptional job of capturing what it's like to fall in love as a teenager - the uncertainty, the fear, the delicate ...

    Jul 29, 2012
  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Cigarettes, Change

    This was just gorgeous. At first I was put off by the lack of quotation marks (one of my biggest literary pet peeves), but I liked your prose so I ...

    Jul 29, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Circus Of Song Intro

    First of all, I'm not a big fan of the right-alignment you've got going on -- I'm not too particular about formatting, usually, but that kind of bugged me as ...

    Oct 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Town of Wolves chapt. 2

    Hey! I'm back for another review! :D I aplogize in advance for my nitpicky-ness, and for the fact that my review is freakishly long. I found out the next day ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Town of Wolves chapt. one

    Hey, WaywardBird! Ok, I'm going to start with my very nitpicky critique, and then move on from there.... It was a midnight plague, placed upon us all by nature. It ...

    Jul 10, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Deleted

    Hi again, megsug! Mmm, I'm finding less and less to critique as I go on! A very good sign... ;) I really loved this installment. I adore your description of ...

    Mar 3, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Deleted

    Hi again, megsug! Mmm, another lovely instalment! I really like the way you set this up - though I'm not sure how crazy I am that the Masquerader's gender was ...

    Mar 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Deleted

    Hiya, megsug! First off - I really like this plot and can't wait to read more on that basis. Personally, I don't mind info-dumps in prologues as long as they ...

    Mar 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Between The Shadows Ch. 1

    Hiya! Well, I usually start with the bad and then segway into the good, but most of my nitpicks were already picked up by Speele, so I won't go too ...

    Feb 18, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Winter Chapter 2

    Hi again, and might I say, another job very well done! Okay, this time, I'm going to start with my criticisms... She didn’t look like she was waiting on or ...

    Jan 17, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Winter Chapter 1

    Wow, this was truly fantastic! I love the way you write - you have a real knack for developing your atmosphere; your descriptions walk that treacherous tight-rope between offhand and ...

    Jan 17, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Stormbringer - 2

    Hmm... very nice. Let me start off by saying that I am not a fan of short chapters. Not to critisize your choice of chapter length, or anything. I can ...

    Jan 1, 2011


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