Oniyuri

Haha, don't worry. I'll try not to tear this apart too bad. I'm assuming you're a beginner writer? Whether you are or not it's okay. As you keep writing you ...

Let me just start this by saying this is wonderfully written! I especially love the use of bold like what ashpandas said. This was pretty dark but it was amazing. ...

This is great! I especially love how descriptive and detailed this is. I also love reading the main character's thoughts. Especially those "where are you's" that keeps being repeated. Keep ...