OneSun

Hi, just a short one then! This isn't really a story yet, more an extract, it would be worth developing on the topic though. It the start to the day ...

Hi! This is a good piece, quite inventive and origional however there are a few things that need to be checked, mostly grammar! Firstly, you start in first person then ...

Hi! To start with, although there isn't much here yet there is potential for a good story as long as you make sure you keep it origional, detective stories can ...

Hello! To begin with I think this has great potential as a first chapter. It's got a lot of intrigue that could lead the story to various places, your characters ...

Hello! I know you've already had a fair few replies but the more the better eh? Firstly I think the idea has potential to move forward, you have made a ...