Omni

I like this story a lot, and I can tell that you are going to make more for it because of the name of the post :) One thing that ...

I cannot say much except that when you are doing a two-sided dialougue, you wann start a new paragraph each time the other person is talking. Makes it easier to ...

I love this scene right here! Reall gets the blood pumping. If you make this into a book, I have a feeling it will be great. I like how you ...