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Comments in red. ‘Miss Madeleine? It’s time to wake.’ Waking up isn't really the best way to start anything aside from the day, IMO. It's overdone. I barely catch the ...

Mr. and Mrs. Belmer lived in a small house on the outskirts of our town for over thirty years and no one had seen them come out of the house ...

Comments in red. The Hard Times By: Desiree Rinehart Chapter 1 My name is Desiree and since I was 12 I knew my mom had a sickness called pulmonary fibrosis, ...

Comments in red. Welcome all to my first Science-Fiction experiments. Do read the spoiler, it's important. :D No thanks. I'll let the story stand on its own. This what I ...

Comments in red. This is my first short story. If you like it click "Like" ^up^ to the left, please! Thanks :smt003 That night was really spooky for people who ...

Comments in red. Alright, so I'm writing this book, and I have to write a kissing scene because... well, I do. But I have never, ever written one before now. ...

Comments in red. This is Part one of two. It was written for lilymoore's contest. Rip it to pieces :) ~peanut~ “Killing kids isn’t my forte, Rae, I told you ...

Hey there Jagged. Comments in red. 1. There is a man sitting in the study. I don't know how I feel about the way this sentence is structured. I think ...

Hey Yuri! I'm here to review. Comments in red, as usual. This is for Skins' music with Words contest. :smt003 Hope you like it, guys! :smt004 Just to let you ...

Hey Isha. ^^ Comments in red, as usual. This is just something I did in my spare time earlier this morning. It's not really a story story, just an introduction ...

Comments and corrections in red. My first attempt at trying to write something 'original'. Plan on writing a short story everyday for the next 2 months in an attempt to ...

Comments in red. The smell of the dungeons was putrid. How so? Also, sentences work better if it's active and not passive. So maybe change it - make it into ...

Hey Eli. ^^ Comments in red. This is just an experimental piece of flash fiction I wrote--enjoy! - As the sun set into the horizon and the waves flapped gently ...

Comments in red. This is only the first part of chapter one, i decided since i couldn't write anymore, that i would post it and see what feedback i got. ...

I was bored on this gorgeously-rainy day, so I decided to look for a little writing challenge. Went onto a place where I found a short-story challenge generator. Anyway, this ...