Nutty

Very good! I assume this is a stand alone piece? I was interested the whole way through the piece, well done. It was a baby crying. Not just crying, but ...

Okay, first of all, have you read the rules? Here at YWS we try to keep a 2:1 review to posted work ratio. In other words, you are supposed to ...

You've been busy! I noticed you've fixed all of the flaws I found.... It's going to be hard to actually give you a decent critique, I didn't spot much wrong ...

Hmmmm..... Well, I think the dialogue flows better in this part, well done ^^ Yeah, as Spring rain said... I don't know where they are. In a city? A resort? ...

Hey! I liked this. And, in spite of the fact English is your second language, I found very little grammar mistakes, and the word choice was overall, decent. Just one ...

But how could he, for although he couldn’t speak. For although he couldn't speak what? 'Although' implies there would be something he could do. It's sort of like using 'but'. ...

Hmm, I like this. Though the dialogue got confusing, I suggest you start a new line when a new person starts speaking. It makes who is speaking clearer, and the ...

Tears flood here eyes, her Why she suddendly went cold. Suddenly Now I'm not much of a poet, but is there a purpose to the underlines? Maybe there is, and ...

the tird time Uhh... third between to different two it provided quit an amusement for Him and his subjects. Quite between to females, both a soft pail gray color with ...

:lol: This story reminded me of a fable. It made me laugh, too. I loved the start. Very clever However, fact is there is a turtle dancing and talking, but ...

Hmm... okay, interesting. Just try adding some punctuation to the dialogue, to make it easier to read- Molly it's nine in the morning wake up!" Molly opened the door of ...

Haha, I actually liked those last three the most. Reinforces the innocence of the child, in my opinion. Was sad, though. And thought provoking. with one singly Single, you mean? ...

Ah, poor Dallas. Though, I don't think he was the type to write a poem lol! Anyway, I liked it. Not that that counts for much.... I'm useless at poetry... ...

Interesting.... Hmm... As a kid is biking down the sidewalk he is late as usual. As he bikes past “Big Ted’s Noodle explosion take out” an old fat man yelled ...

Okay, this is good. Interesting, it has an 'old' feel to it. It reminds me of how women were allegedly treated a couple of centuries ago. I didn't spot too ...