Nox

Here’s my review: the faint sliver mist swirling sliver or silver? they force fed you since you young you missed out ‘were’. they force fed you since you were young ...

Here’s my review: I liked the prologue, it was nice and short. The faint sound of footsteps echoed through the trees. I don’t think ‘trees’ is the right word; maybe ...

OK, Bobo's done most of the corrections my review is on the last part: Please change the numbers! "Within 3 days Minnur was a graveyard..." Three not 3, etc, etc. ...

Here’s my review: I got out bed , correction I got out of bed . toward the bathroom I think it’s meant to be towards the bathroom . He was ...

Here is my review: “surrounded be four wooden..” change to ‘by’: “surrounded by four wooden” . “rickety door” Try not to use the same words too often, you can change ...

There's too much dialogue and not much description like Sam said. Here is my review: "You don't actually think it’s haunted." This would look better if it was a question: ...

I have read parts one and two; they’re not too bad because you’ve made changes people have suggested. Part three is a little short so here is my review: "his ...

Apart from a few mistakes like: “Let me past, or he dies.” which should be "Let me pass, or he dies." I really liked this but I was a little ...

It’s a very short story so it was very easy to read. It was good but needs something to give it a more interesting read. You could have described what ...

There could have been more to this poem but here's my review: You repeated again too often so it was a little boring. It was an OK-ish poem but the ...

I liked it even though there wasn't much in it. My favourite bits are: soft air humming, cool buzz and neon green flash flash flash, plastic snakes dissappearing . I ...

I can be nice but I can't be hard! I liked to from the beginning to the end. I can just imagine Henry and Daphne going to the temple and ...

Comment on 1A: There was too many things described I had to start reading it from the start again. When you wrote, "using his staff to feel the way" I ...

The prologue didn't really interest me at all and doesn't really say what the book/story is about. Prologues usually are meant to inform the reader a little bit about what ...

Good story! The first thing I liked was how each of the five men entered the room and introduced themselves. You could have described what they looked like in detail ...