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Re: Metaphorical Clouds
Good poem! I liked the metaphors ;) I think the last two lines of the second stanza sound a bit awkward when read or spoken, which is too bad because ...
Jun 4, 2013 -
Re: Time Slips Away
Wow, this is great! As good as, if not better, then your last work. You're improving! Anyways, to the review. The first paragraph confuses me a little. Was the narrator ...
Jan 9, 2013 -
Re: No Respawns
Wow, great ending! I got pretty into the story, it was exciting. I didn't notice any grammatical errors. I think you did a good job giving just the information the ...
Jan 4, 2013 -
Re: Post-its on the fridge
Oh no! Worst thing that can happen to the writer! This was a pretty interesting story! I was engrossed the whole time and wanted to see what happened. :'( It's ...
Dec 23, 2012 -
Re: the craft of ember
I'm guessing you submitted this from a strange format, but there's a ton of question marks that are kind of annoying. Maybe it's my computer's problem. Ignoring them, this is ...
Dec 23, 2012 -
Re: Roadside Bench
Hi! I think this is really good! You're really captured the moment. Some of the words or phrases you used seemed a bit overdone, but that's just me and I ...
Dec 8, 2012
