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Hi Simon, I like how you made the plot exiting. I like how they went to a Buddhist temple. I wonder if you could use more show and less tell. ...

Hi Bryce, The way your story has a funny plot makes the story seem more exiting. How your story ends with a twist made me laugh. I wonder if you ...

Hi Isiah, I like how you wrote about a lot of information that has to do with Taoism. The context that you wrote your story was unique and I liked ...

Hi Jacob, I like how your story contained a lot of information. The last paragraph was quite long, so it would be good if you would split the paragraph into ...

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