NikkiLow

Good story. :) I have to say though, it got a bit confusing. All the he, it, The Hero, Blue Jay, partner, etc. I couldn't tell who was who, what ...

Hm.. I have to say, I've read a lot of things like this. Personally, this isn't something I'd read- I'm into reading from authors like J.R. Ward, and so to ...

Hmm. I think you wrote this very well. There were a couple words that weren't needed, and kind of disrupted the flow, but I think the end result is good. ...

I have to hand it to you, I liked it. I wasn't quite sure what all was going on, but it kept me interested whilst I was reading. I found ...

I must admit, as I'm writing this, I have to say I haven't read your story yet. I'll comment on it altogther after I'm done. :) ------------------------------------------------------------------------

Awuh, she's just mean. She didn't even read the whole thimg, so she can't properly criticize you. While I did like it, the characters got a bit confusing and mixed ...

Wow, I must say, that was very impressive. Makes most of what I read seem like children's work. Though I normally wouldn't read this sort of thing, I was too ...