NightsDreamer2277

Wow. That was an unexpected ending, but this story is well done. You incorperate many aspects of fear and thought that make your reader think and the details put me ...

This story is rather confusing. In the beginning you switch between perspectives a lot, and without defining marks, it leaves the reader wondering if it is a mistake. It does ...

This was a very interesting part to read. You capture Sakura's obsession with Sasuke's opinion of her well. However, I didn't really see anything about this plot that made it ...

Wow. Your title interested me because "Click, Click, Boom" is an inside thing among my friends. It was very well written, and I didn't find any obvious errors in it. ...

Ok, this is a very interesting story. I like the basics of the storyline but there are a few problems that I noticed as well. First, you need to work ...

This was well written. I enjoyed the way you portray the master and his pupil as well as the religious conflict in the area. There were no obvious grammer mistakes ...

You're story is well done. Prisoner of War's views are difficult to do in fair justice and you have done an excellent job with that. It has no obvious grammatical ...

Thank you for letting me know about the update in the story. Your writing has an interesting way of pulling me in and making me want more. The only thing ...

Hmm, I'm not one to critque on grammar, so I won't. Your story line is intriguing, and you develop the main character well, but it is slightly confusing as to ...

Your storyline is good, but it's a bit confusing. If you added more detail on the charaters and what exactly they're facing, it will add to your storyline. Don't be ...

It's an intresting piece... but it's confusing because of the spacing. If you could add a space between your paragraphs it would be alot easier to read. Personally, I think ...

Very nice! The cat perspective is something that I have not come across before, but you portray it nicely. As far as grammar goes, I don't see any obvious mistakes. ...

Wow... I've read alot of your work, and I have to say that I like this one the best. It's the perfect combination of suspense and action. You've really done ...

I have to say, I read all four before deciding to comment. Your story line is good, but it strays quite a bit from the Naruto main elements. However, it ...

Its an intresting start. Anyway, the discriptions are good, but towards the end it becomes difficult to establish who is who among the characters. The only other thing I thought ...