NightWriter

Gosh. That was amazing. I love the first line, and how it's repeated as the last. The part: I'm see through. is really good too. I can imagine them talking, ...

This is getting better and better! I CANNOT wait for the next chapter! Before I start rambling on how amazing it was, there was just one thing at the beginning: ...

Mmm, yes, Lampshade Dress is a beautiful phrase. In my perspective, the story is kind of about watching a young girl and thinking of how her future could be so ...

I really liked the way in which you write. You have a really super-authentic touch to your words. Something like where your reader can feel exactly what you're writing about. ...

Yeah you have great potential, absolutely! What you need to watch, is when you read over it, continue to ask yourself, "Am I confused?" Cause if you are, we are. ...

"Fat Beached Whale" haha :) It was actually super good for someone with apparent Writer's Block! Congratulations on your future son :) Your poem was simple, but in a really ...

Oooooh! That was awesome! I really loved it. I loved what it was about, the words it used, the progress through the was all incredible! [Chorus] [Guitar/bass solo (haven't decided)] ...

You're writing about such a heavy topic, which I love. This bit is fantastic: My life's fucked up, I know I need a haircut. Where you carelessly just jump from ...

Yeah I also got a little confused here...Still; it's written really well and there are very little mistakes, so well done. Your dialogue is really good - a bit choppy ...

Always Dogs. So amazing. Your writing really steals in your readers. Your words are so delicate, so strong. The whole thing flows together with an amazing smoothness. And yet, even ...

What a beautiful piece of writing. This part alone makes me cringe with some kind of isolated feeling: "This was where dreams were shattered. The tangle of limbs, clothes haphazardly ...

Hey CreativelyYours! Again, this is an amazing piece! The only thing that hasn't been pointed out is, I plopped back down in front of him and placed my bottle on ...

Hey Flyingchaos! That was an incredibly emotional piece. I loved it from start to finish! You have a fantastic ability to create pictures with your words and you've done it ...

That was beautiful! Really, really emotive! The descriptive language features you used were very effective. this particular part flowed really well: These are blue words, sad songs that men write ...

You've written this beautifully! It's so soft and gentle, but the words are very powerful. I loved it from the beginning words. Shloka19 has already pointed out the only issues. ...