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It's great so far. You're combining the two aspects of the story really well. There are a few people who would lose focus, so watch out for it. He wore ...

I want to apologize for not catching this story earlier. I'll do a quick one over for you. Or what collage I want to go to, if college is what ...

But this is what really happened. Using a conjunction at the start of a sentence is generally a bad idea, but sometimes writing style will let you get away with ...

Hey there. Really enjoyed this one. You knocked it out of the park. the fiery licks of rage managed to only skirt along her thoughts. You use fire as a ...

Welcome to the site. I look forward to seeing you around here. A little note though, before you post something try to review first. This gets your name out there ...

A week and a half past and Iggy and Jackson visited 6 times to visit the dead frog named Toad (even though he was a frog?). too many visits. As ...

There is very little that can be directly critiqued or brought into question here. Definitely nothing that I could quote and say "Right here. This. Fix it." You paint a ...

Another thing that can be very good in persuasive essays is the use of sources. If you can show that there are like minded people then it really demonstrates that ...

Hey there clograbby. I'm going to try the whole stewie griffin compliment sandwich thing. I'll open up with something you did really well then do my whole editing thing and ...