Niamh

Thanks to both of you. I appreciate your encouragment.

An overly taught piece of night What a great description. This is so original, which is always wonderful to see. It definitely stands out among descriptive pieces. Good job, you ...

Thanks, MH. Yeah, I recieved those comments. I've been hesitant to post more for lack of comments, but here is chapter 2 (I have half of this story written already, ...

I loved this. It was so simple and earnest, but felt like something any writer could relate to. As I read, I kept choosing favorite parts, but there were too ...

But of course, she thought to herself His weakness was his devotion So she gave to him a vision Filled with horror and false notion Above all, the Flame desired ...

Thank you so much! That was a good explanation. I was pretty sure I knew what inverted syntax meant, but I just wanted to make sure. I really appreciate such ...

Thanks for reading, Poor_Imp. I can't think of a more rewarding comment than to be compared to Tolkien. He was a master--and though I'm not a Lord of the Rings ...

And i can't even describe how often i have felt trapped by the rhyme scheme into saying something i don't really want to say. That captures about how I'm feeling ...

Thanks for your points--though I don't really understand the purpose of points. Are they just so we can post in the randomness/lounge sections? Anyway, thanks so much for reading. Shun--it's ...

Thanks for reading. I agree with that the rhyming scheme could use quite a bit of work, but I still want to keep the rhyming. It makes the story flow ...

Creative. The imagery is nice--for some reason, it makes me picture Michelangelo's work. The vocabulary is broad and beautiful. I didn't seem to have a particular rhythm, but overall, very ...

This was beautiful. I love anything connected to nature.

You already know how much I like this story (I commented on it at the Society Revisited) so I'm just going to compliment your work again. The minor revisions make ...

The word for this would be provocative. It unfortunately encapsulates much of what people experience--or expect--of their 17th year. The prose is beautiful. Poetic writing is of the best sort. ...

“We best gather our things,” affirmed Faolán glumly, rolling up the blankets from the floor. That process did not take long, for the McCann’s owned very little: a few pieces ...