Navita

I am still flying and the buildings are still very much in the clouds, thank you. And you got another thing wrong: I dislike Plato.

Kylan, Two things: 1) you need jazz 2) I hope you're not getting lazy Do something about the rhythm in this, because at the moment there isn't one. Navita

Careful what you put in a spoiler, especially if you want me to respond to all of it, everything you mention. You talked of experimentalism; that's why I addressed that, ...

Er. This is getting to the stage where it's ridiculous. How many times do you expect me to tell you I love you? Navi

Hi blackbird, I’m Navita; pleased to meet you. I don’t have my torch or pitchfork with me right now, but I daresay you don’t need as much illumination nor slicing ...

blackbird – Your endless capacity for edits is leaving me somewhat amazed. I will comment on changes only, since you know my thoughts on everything else above. Firstly, uncapitalisation added ...

Hey blackbird - So! A redraft, eh? Let's take a look at this: Light washes through the square window and seeps into her, unwanted warmth on her face Good; you ...

Hey Galerius - So, another dream-poem. My first thought? (And do be aware that I had to search far into the depths of memory for this, since the readings between ...

Jagged, I can't even begin to tell you how amazing you are.

Since I'm on a bit of a dissection roll tonight, I might as well continue. religion I actually used this one to help unlock the other two. Maybe I was ...

Okay, yes. I'm back. plums (this fell sergeant) Your titles are really something. 'Sergeant' - I want to know what this is referring to. This poem seems even more fleeting ...

And - this must be a record for subsequent reviews - but after taking into account that idea about 'Emergency,' talking to Jagged for a bit, and contemplating the concept ...

Kylan - Yes, I noticed it was called 'daddy'. And I am familiar with using titles as an extension of ideas in poetry. But once again, your themes - subthemes, ...

Me again. But. I need to get to the heart of this. Two questions I want myself to answer by the end of this: why did I not see it ...

Hey Ky - So, a shorter poem - or at least one with shorter lines. This is certainly intriguing. An experiment, I presume? :P (You know how much I love ...