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Thanks everyone! I will take what you all said and try and use the points in my revision of the piece! :D

Yeah, I meant the graphic ones. :D But how is it written?

Hey! I really like the song but it seems a bit choppy in parts. Smooth it up a bit and it'll be perfect. I do love it though. The chorus ...

@suicidallybeautiful don't worry about it. I thank you for your criticism! Thanks to everyone else, too. :) Chrissie

thanks, though. :D

Henry, Joey, Laura AND Eleanor are main characters. Not just Eleanor. I just started out with her.

I added italics. It makes a lot more sense now. :)