Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Hello! The formatting is pretty off, hard to read in some parts, but I can edit it for you if ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The door to the bedroom was open a crack, and Crystal peeked inside to find Alyssa looking through a small ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * And how as the thirteen-year-old, already small for his age, supposed to see past all these fools and find an ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Alya was silent as we flew back to the lookout. I had a smile on my face. When we got there, she sat ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Babushka had many grandchildren; and she liked to think of them while she painted. I think the beginning sentence sets the scene with ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I sighed and shifted my position, the branch I was perched on wasn’t the best and I seriously considered moving ...

Chaos. The young man to his right took off running. During the Accountant’s suicide, he had been spattered with blood, bone, and a gelatinous consistency, what he surely thought must ...

“They here?” the one with the swords inquired brusquely of the blonde one. That supposed to be 'they're'? * Hello! One thing I'd like to ask is: why is the ...

Hello Trident! The only thing I can point out that came up too often was the mention of 'white', for their clothing you could have given a list instead of: ...

Green = Commen/Correction Black = Review * It wasn’t Karoon . Karoon would not have left the job undone a second time. ‘Karoon’ so close together! Maybe replace it with ...

The bass-lines were always so thick and heavy that she could feel the sounds reverberate deep in the bones of her chest. I liked that, reminds me of the summer ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * At least there was some advantage to belonging to that race—any non-humans who tried to enter LN had very hard times of it ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I walked off down the hallway and down a small set of stairs . What do you mean by ‘small ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * When the sign hung over my head, I let hand seductively and luxuriously graze across the metal poles that supported ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * There were no people out this late , which suited him. How about: No one out this late ... The ...