My-mystique-Eyes

I think it could use some punctuation and maybe different placing of the lines. It may just have been me but I kept stumbling over it, It didn't seem to ...

Okay, umm....i really did not understand this poem very much at all. I didn't really like it either. That doesn't mean that it's worthless, I just didn't get anything out ...

wow, this is cool. I liked it because at times, i can relate. it's very depressing but interesting. I'm not really sure how you can improve it, other than what ...

wow, this is really sweet. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it. Well I think that your biggest problem is that there were wayyy too many coma's where ...

WOW! That was really amazing! :D I really liked it. I like the way that you put the words together, they were very pretty and you had a nice flow. ...

wow, that has a lot of potential. It's good. Very nice rythem and a creative mix of words. however there are a few parts that seem a little too original ...

yeah, shesarabel's right. It's very cool, you did a great job on making ppl feel what you are feeling. Reading it made me feel like my mind was going mad! ...

wow! This is beautiful! If there was anything To change I would tell you, but...I think it's pretty much perfect. I expecially like the line that says, You reach for ...

Personally I think it's pretty cool, cuz there was a time not so long ago I felt exactly the same and i tried to write a song about it, but ...

Well I'm really really NOT good at critiquing, but I really liked it. I think it was really good and i think it painted a great picture of loving and ...