Mr_Bacon

EDIT::: You say you didn't change this at all, eh? That's weird, why would it have come up in stanzas when I reviewed it? Anyway, I guess you'll have to ...

My review is going to be rather scathing, I'm afraid. I don't really see how this is a story. Perhaps if this was something you actually experienced you could incorporate ...

Your comments about time tickle my debate bone, and make me want to philosophically disagree :P but as a piece of writing, I can't fault it. As the previous reviewer ...

To be honest, I didn't read all of it. Here are a few suggestion to clean it up a bit though: - Capitalization: characters with special titles need capitalized names/titles. ...

Is this a Guild Wars fanfic? It's not bad if it is, but I had to wonder because that game has a city called Rin as well as Flameseekers. Quick ...

It's nice in its way, but it's not much of a poem. See if you can flesh it out some more, and give it some actual stanzas. And isn't it ...