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MrGreen

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Teen Fiction Re: Burning

    Hello Bobster28 First of all I really must congratulate you on what is a magnificent little story. It is well-written and excellently thought out, with an extremely satisfying twist at ...

    Feb 13, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Sketches from the Last Months

    I really like this poem. It is unusual but has a nice rhythm to it, and I love your sparing but effective use of language, as it conjures up some ...

    Jan 11, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Before - 01

    This is an interesting piece of writing with some excellent potential. The style of your writing is unique, and although in places it doesn't always work, I think that with ...

    Dec 5, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Thirty Days Though the Forest. Part Two.

    This is fantastic! I was looking forward to reading the second chapter of this story, and it certainly does not disappoint. It easily as good, if not better, than chapter ...

    Aug 24, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Thirty Days Though the Forest. Part One.

    This is an interesting story and the premise is original; which is nice to see in a medieval fantasy setting. Its also good that you have used a protagonist who ...

    Aug 20, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Withering Thyme

    This is an original and well-written piece of writing. The narrative drive and purpose is almost flawless, and, as far as I can ascertain there were no typing or punctuation ...

    Aug 14, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Cursed world: Prologue

    This is an intriguing little story which displays great imagination. It draws the reader in almost immediately with its simple and direct prose; something which is essential to all good ...

    Jun 7, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Tolerance

    I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. It flows well, and I think that the choppiness that you refer to, and the fact that not every part rhymes, only contributes to ...

    Apr 5, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Last Breath of Fire, Prologue

    This is an interesting and captivating prologue. It is well-written and has the potential to grow into something very good. Your prose style is simple yet evocative; and I particularly ...

    Mar 11, 2014
  • Short Story » Horror, Other Re: The Hook

    This a competent adaptation of the Hook legend; it is well-written and flows nicely from beginning to end. However if I could be permitted to make one criticism; you could ...

    Mar 4, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: Flitchling: Cry Wolf

    This is a very good piece of writing; and an enjoyable one too. The exposition is handled extremely well, and the background detail regarding the werewolf houses is original and ...

    Mar 4, 2014


When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people.
— Abraham Heschel