MotherVirgo

Well...the newer chapters will only be uploaded on Wattpad. :)

I'm serious. I really want this story to be good, and you're a talented proofreader. With this being said; I make this proposal genuine. Also, I just edited both of ...

Yeah, you are helpful. Please...stick around. I think you'll come in handy...I'll even shout you out if I publish this as a real book one day. :D

Also, you mentioned dialogue many times. I think that If I started a new paragraph for every time a new set of quotes started, some paragraphs would just be sentences.

By the way, the planets orbiting Wantasy are like our planets orbiting the sun. Wantasy's moons are inside of Wantasy because it's huge.

Don't worry, I revise what's already here, thanks to you. I find the: "And breath!" part funny. Anyway, this was more constructive than any of the critiquing I've had this ...

Exposition; If I explain things the way I'd want to it would just go on the other side of the spectrum. >_

-earth years, *Wantasy years~

- I deleted the two other Mantel things, and will edit it. - I did mention the barricade; it was the walls that began to concuss around the capsule once ...

Thank you for your input. It felt more negative than positive, but that's life right? When life gives you lemons, squirt em in your wounds. Hey, thanks. I get that ...

Hi, I just have a few questions for your review. So, what I'd like to know is: 1. Do capsules usually move themselves? Probs not; This capsule, however, CAN move ...

Hey, please read it once I edit it!

This is exactly what I was told when I said that about drawing. The problem is that it isn't an interest of mine...yet.

*Tackles and smooches* Thank youu! I know, there are more errors than there are perks, and I know I shouldn't write. I know I don't have talent, but I've been ...

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