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I love the imagery of the second stanza. The first few stanzas are very fairytail-like. It's so romantic. And I like the way the last two stanzas are so cynical. ...

Your rhyme scheme is weird. Your poem gets thrown off by it. It isn't fluid at all. Maybe go back and try to give it a definite rhyme scheme instead ...

I'm going to guess that you're a girl. I'm a little confused at to why you kept using male pronouns here ("his mistake", "his art", "his work"). I think it ...