MoonlitDream57

Firstly, let me say how well you've characterized Hadley. She is relatable, wonderfully reserved, and down-to-earth. I could see myself in her personality. Her despondence is tragic but beautiful. I ...

I very much like your concept for this story! The introduction was woven together quite nicely. I like the fact that Layla, the protagonist, is telling the reader who Mercy ...

This isn't going to be an ENTIRELY nice review, but I also have good news. I'll give you the bad just to get it out of your way(being told the ...

I'm very intrigued by the lore in this story! Illusionists, Ordinaries, Cassidega--fantasy always pulls me into the world. It feels like you took a lot of time and detail to ...

Humor-wise, you have a very strange way of making a reader laugh and smile. But it works, I'll give you that! There were undoubtedly parts in this piece where it ...

I'd very much like to see more from this! It was unique how you didn't go for the cliche image of an angel, who is always seen as pure and ...

When the reader can imagine themselves standing next to the protagonist as everything is happening, that's when you know the writing has been well-thought out. As for the imagery, sensory, ...