Mizzle

If you cared enough to look then you’d agree but I smile on the out. It hurts so much, but no one has ever noticed. It’s because they don’t want ...

This story is off to an amazing start. I think maybe just fix what everyone else has been saying, and it will be flawless. I love the introductory, and the ...

Zerkk basically covered what I was going to say. Please do not post in all bold; not only is it unneeded, it is quite irritating to the eyes to have ...

Nice work. One thing I noticed is when you said 'paper mashie' you spelled mache wrong, so it drew my attention away from the poem and over to MASHed potatoes. ...

First of all, I loved this story. Very descriptive and...calming, I suppose. Your descriptions are great, and so is the whole story. I agree with what eddykins said about this ...

Nice seems like you jump around a little, maybe you could focus on the emotions of your MC a little bit another person said, try and give us reasons why ...

Great story, first of all. I didn't notice any problems at all! I feel like there is an emotional depth behind your story here, and your characters. The writing is ...