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Hi there Greenwitch! Okey dokey, well I thought the story idea was really great. The beginning sentence was awesome, as soon as I read it I was like glued to ...

Mmmkay, first off I just wanted to say that that you have an awesome story idea here, and great writing style. I just have a few nitpicks to share. :) ...

Hey, first of all you have really good writing style. The beginning was very good, since it had just a touch of sarcastic humor in it (the best kind of ...

First off, I just have to say "AWWWWWW!!!!!" That is so incredibly nice of you!!! :D I hope your friend is feeling happier now! Anyway, down to business. 8) I ...

Wow. *stares dumbly*. Wow. It sounded very old-fashioned, which I'm sure you were aiming for, so good job with that. But... I don't know, I think you went a little ...

Hey, nice work! Sorry if some stuff is explained earlier that I mention, but I haven't read part A or B. First off, you need quotes for dialogue. I couldn't ...

That was really good! I loved the description of the characters and the setting, you seem to know a lot about medieval times. I just have a few things I ...

This was really great! The parts about the game of life really made me think, and it made me sort of connect with the character somehow, though I'm not sure ...

Pretty much my only critiques are: One, everything sounds very... I guess kind of matter-of-fact. It was very just mellow and 'oh, this person did this and this other person ...

First off, that was really good, it really got my attention and kept me reading. Now to the critiques... I thought it moved a little too fast, you could have ...