Mich4el

That isn't even an excuse :-/ I'd learn from your criticisms

What you said about another paragraph starting only because the girl began talking is true; it made me really see the issue. Thanks. And more action. noted. Thanks for reading

The entire 'story' is dialogue, hence the paragraph thing.

Hey. Er, I guess the first quote was about tye narrator talking about how being so aware of certain things should make the outcomes positive. And the second is about ...

I aimed for reappeared ideas, and I guess, subconsciously made them. Those examples you made, I wasn't consciously aware of what they were doing. I had a sense of their ...

Thank you for commenting. As for the question mark, perhaps I should have added it. Something about him made me not to though. I'm yet to figure out what that ...

I typed on my mobile hence the cliche doesn't have an accent mark. I wrote this piece and edited late at night and was feeling sleepy so I guess that's ...