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How exactly do you guys write together? Do you do every other chapter?

Yeah I see that now. I guess you did some reviews :)

Wow, that was emotional. A very beautiful poem about a sister's love. The words you chose fit perfectly, really good for the theme and attitude of the poem. You really ...

OK. one other thing. This seems very unrealistic to me that she somehow has survived fifty lashes with a whip that shreds her back apart. I know that the torturer ...

Well done! This is a fast-paced chapter that kept me interested the whole way. Although you didn't spend much time on details of the place I can still envision it ...

OK, I edited some more. This is my final version so . . . on to chapter 2.

Hey, if I can satisfy you when your worst, then I should be able too write best.

Haha. So, I edited it. Mainly I made a few sentences longer, added a few more personal thoughts, and put a space in between each new paragraph. Tell me if ...

Wow! Re-reading I really see what you mean. This might take some time. :)

Thanks for the review. I've been told many times my details are not enough. My question would be: in what part of my writing are the details vague? Is it ...

Glad to hear the parallel world idea is appealing. It's been over ten chapters since I wrote this, but I'll go back and try to improve it. :)

OK, so, great to hear you can connect with the airsoft. Now, don't feel bad, because you review does seem negative, but hey, I put my stuff up for getting ...

You could perhaps divide the chapter at the end of the poem as well as at the beginning of the desert scene.

One more thing. although this is your decision, I would suggest you shortening the chapters. At least for me, when I sit down at my laptop to read I like ...

This was well done. I have to say that the you are disgusting could refer to so many things in life, could even be replaced by others words such as ...