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i shall beat you to the finish lines *runs off*

Completely understand! :)

glad to hear you say all these things. I have a prologue, but upon reconsideration I'm going to cut it. You would possibly understand Castor more if you read it, ...

ah, so i wasn't too far off. Sadly, a lot of what you wrote is ALREADY happening. I don't think you need to say "the future" I don't understand what ...

any examples or suggestions?

It feels awkward, eh. As in HOW I wrote it, or WHAT I wrote? Indented?

Haha i am laughing at some of this. The part about arriving at the doctor's house, was because a previous reviewer thought that part to be confusing. But I can ...

indeed i do!

Is that like my new nickname? :)

OK, lemme first reply to your opening "typos" The His, was completely unintentional, LOL It is acceptable to use exclamation points in place of question marks, I am pretty sure. ...

Thanks Aurora! I didn't go into a ton of detail of Kalan, but I assure you his whole body is in shambles right now :P ?If you read the other ...

you may be back sooner. I'm on a roll :P Glad I caught most of the typos! I will never win the battle against commas. But! I will definitely try ...

no, haha. It took 4 word wars.

you write as much as you can in 15 minutes!

yes, this was done in wordwars, so it was written very fast. I'm going to thoroughly go through part 2!