Messenger

Thx for the reviews! I will go back and work some more. If you really are interested I could look into maybe working a fight scene on the end of ...

Hey, I also just edited this as well. I re-worded the opening, gave a small descriptor of the papay, changed wing to "under his large embrace", the line about the ...

Hey I went back and edited the things you pointed out a few weeks ago. If you could just read those sentences and lemme know what you think that would ...

i never wanna talk about the POV problems in this chapter again xD it was so bad.

so when you inhale snow that is light and fluffy (which it is when it's so cold that it won't be melting into water) it acts a little bit like ...

I'm not nearly as active as I used to be! :( So I didn't realize that you had written all these reviews which I will be reading now :)

i never got a notification for this review but thank you so much! You really found a blindspot I had with the fact that Devlin doesn't know those facts about ...

I just reread this chapter and i gotta say, except for the ending, I love this chapter so much

and yeh she freaked out a lil bit

hey, better late than never right? Thanks so much for those pointers, this is why you are the best :) He does not have wings xD I meant like under ...

Hey So i used papay in the way you would dad mom father etc. So when he is being called it's Papay but when talking him as in his familial ...

Oh yeah. So you have tons of room to work with in the future if you wanted to revise and still keep it short.

haha good points made all around. As always :D

I think you should delete it %uD83D%uDE02

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