Meshalidar

Lovely piece of work here. I enjoyed it. Took me a while to edit it, though. I'm not sure I got all of them... Nice job, nonetheless. E D I ...

Very nicely done... A good read. On with the editting of grammatical errors. Chapter One Stren’s M other and F ather and especially his brothers, Eric and Sean. Unnecessary capitalization. ...

Very nicely done. These little areas of the story cause eagerness to read the entire thing. To the editing... First Part Sarah looked over the scene unfolding below her. You ...

Very nice. Good job with this piece of work. Just as Matt Bellamy said, try not to overwhelm the reader. You might consider having the attitude that your reader will ...

First, you might consider using pronouns a little more frequently. It becomes slightly repetitious saying ‘Lirin’ in two sentences coming right after one another there is no one else except ...

Very nice story. I enjoyed it greatly. But unfortunately, I cannot match ZZAP's skill of Lordship over Editing. I will try though... ' Suddenly, the great gold dove for a ...