Merry_Haven

Ashley- Sorry I've hadn't the time to read this, but I regret I hadn't read it sooner. Because this first chapter had definitely gotten me hooked by the first paragraph. ...

Ashley- That was so sad! And yet so good. The way you describe the scenery, especially the fall leaves, is just amazing. I felt sorry for Tony that Darci cheated ...

Lurlene_Mcdaniel_Rox- I kept my eyes focused on the computer screen because this story was intense. It was well written, but I felt like the ending was rushed. Just a little. ...

booklover- Hehe. Mary. {my own name.} :lol: Anyway, how did her mother find her in the first place? And how is Trey awful? And why did Mary run away? I ...

crazy_lil_blondie- Wow, that was really good. Almost made me cry. :cry: I would say give more descriptions on the scenery, and thoughts of Lizzie, but that was all ready pointed ...

ShushBeDeath- I read your short story and I'm off to review... :wink: You had a lot of referring to the past. Which helped me understand about Anna and the grandma. ...

Writingdreams159- When I first read this I noticed that it was long. Very long. But then I also noticed that you placed 3-4 chapters in one thread. Try to put ...

clueless- This doesn't seem like a chapter 1, more like a prologue or preface. If this is part of a story then give more detail on Jeremy, Derek and Caitlyn. ...

Ashley- This was a long chapter but it gave me more insight on the character's thoughts and feelings. When I read about Rebecca in this chapter, I thought of Victoria ...

Ashley- Okay, this story is totally grabbing me in. Not like it hasn't before, it's just that it's gotten intense now. The coven situation is sad, and I liked Phillip ...

Ashley- I can't say I like the relationship between Issac and Sophia or not. I felt like this chapter went a little too fast for the relationship. So when I ...

Ashley- Dude, Issac must have a thing for Sophia if he gripped her too tightly. But I think I already knew that. :wink: When I read this I was like: ...

Ashley- I can't believe that Sophia got 'solitary confinement' in her room for the weekend. Yet there was a purpose behind that. But seriously why?! Is Sophia ever going to ...

Ashley- Wow. The detail for this chapter and any other chapter for this story is so unexplainable. I can't really find a word for it, besides amazing. The detail on ...

Titch123 - One thing I noticed when reading the revised part was that it was longer. that was great, and it gave me more information about the story. After the ...