Mercury616

He sat facing the window, fingers slowly stroking across the iron next to him. It was dented, and the leather straps that held the pieces together were strained. It's not ...

Unsettling, yes that's the first impression I got. That, to me, is a good thing. Poetry should evoke strong reactive emotions- be they positive or negative. The creepy factor comes ...

Nothing jumped out at me as being incorrect grammatically- not that that means there isn't something. But I really liked this. I'm assuming Hungry Jacks is a fast food joint? ...

great source for prompt, eh? Also, I'm having a hard time thinking of a title, so any ideas as to a title are appreciated. Carter's Secret sometimes taking a line ...

This gives the reader the idea that the pianist is, well, the complete opposite of deaf. That sounds, most specifically music (by her own hand) would be too powerful and ...

This strikes me as Shakespearian with the tragedy and love intermingled, which is why archaic language could have worked just as well as what you've changed it to. Most of ...

This is the 4th draft of this short story. Lemme know if you guys think anything is confusing or needs more detail. Stop and Smell the Roses By: Ralph Gallagher ...

“There’s no clarity in conscience.” damn good opening line. neither of us wore a hat. I don’t remember the moment, or that I ever wore a sundress, let alone wore ...