Megrim

Hello again, another fun chapter and an engaging start for the novel! Can I just say I love the metal forest. Since this is a longer submission, this time I ...

Hi there, back for chapter 2, and excited to see the alternate-but-intersecting POV. When the apple core bounced into the picture, I was like, "OH MAN!" I briefly got carried ...

Hi there, NoahBaker, and welcome to YWS! I'm new here too, but not to critiquing or writing. It's so exciting that this is your first time writing, and it takes ...

Hi there! I saw chapter 3 up in the sci-fi section and figured it made sense to go back and look at chapter 1. The title really intrigued me. This ...

Intriguing start, especially with all the hints of a near/possible future. I like the advanced technology combined with regular daily life, like having the android cat. Also the worldbuilding of ...

Hi there, exciting start you have here. Definitely a tense situation, and good tension is what keeps me reading! For a prologue, the ending felt abrupt to me. It's almost ...

Hey there Terian! I'm brand new to the site but not to critiquing, so hopefully I can be useful without making a bunch of faux pas my first day :S ...

Hi there, Wolf! This is my first day on the site and my 2nd review, so let me know if I make any faux pas :S I really liked this ...

Hi Guardian! I am new to this site, but not critiquing, so I hope this review is ok. This is my first one here! Let me know if I make ...