Meerkat

Sometimes it's easier for characters to exhibit different sides of their personalities when they're confronted with unique situations. For example, Luna might react differently to a fire in the house ...

You're doing great; I'm just nitpicky.

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Hey, Laurenh6. Meerkat here to review! Syntax, word choice, and conventions: -"The silent hallway was illuminated by a lantern, its flame flickering silently..." You repeat the word "silent" here. -"L

It might depend on how you want the story to be interpreted. Does the monster know the girl, for instance? If so, the creature would know her name. Otherwise, just ...

That's totally fine to enjoy the fantasy-feel of some words. It helps, though, when each word has significance or reoccurrence in the book. I really love the book Watership Down ...

Thank you very much for your review. The rhyme on the second and fourth lines of each stanza goes "stressed, unstressed," if that helps any. The French at the end ...

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this, AJ. I'll check out your writing piece as soon as I can!

Wildlife biology? That sounds really neat. If you're planning on expanding your story's world, it'd be interesting to see more of a nature aspect. Write what you know, right? :) ...

Sure thing! I'm glad I was of some assistance. I'll get to chapter 4.1 as soon as I can.

Of sentences. Starting with "So."

First letters, man. :) Notice a certain protagonist?

Even more "first" than that.

No... What's the first thing you noticed?

You've got the first two! I'd say you should look at the beginning (of the actual "review" part) to spy the third.

Hey, there! It's cool if your're short on time. I hope you have more of an opportunity to write in the future. So, I mostly guessed right! Interesting dynamic there ...