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What he saw made him almost choke. Behind the angle stood the lad who wasn't even bad. Maybe you want to move the words around in the first sentence, To ...

Woah. It had some kind of dreamy-like effect when I read it. I think all the mistakes have been pointed out, And I'm not exactly the best person to critique, ...

WOW WOW WOW!!! I love it!!! Continue writing!!! I think being deprived of Midnight Sun is making seek for alternatives. And yours is GOOD. PM me when the next chapter ...

Have I mentioned how I am clawing my eyes out now, waiting for the next chapter? AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME FABULOUS FABULOUS FABULOUS FABULOUS FABULOUS AMAZING AMAZING AMAZING AMAZING ...

Erm. I'm confused. Beckah is the... daughter? And Merde is the... mom? or some foreign language word? Sorry, I'm kinda dumb :D I thought the daughter had a boyfriend... and ...

HAHAHAHAHA. Thanks for giving me a stomache. Too. Much. Laughter. Cannot. Breathe. *Face turns a strange shade of blue* I think everyone's pointed out the mistakes. AWESOME. :D